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Question: WHat do you think of this poem, please tell the truth!.!?
You can see him, walking down the hall,
You like him so much you hope not to fall!.
You walk past each other, smile and gaze!.!.!.
Oh those wonderful days!.
But now you sit at home 100 miles away,
And almost cry about it everyday!.
You both talk so much, and do video chats too!
If only he knew how much he means to you!.
You can't say I love you, though you really do!.
He always says he loves you,
You just say "ya you to!."
Your friends with his sisters, they are 12 and 14!.
They are some of the coolest girls you have EVER seen!.
You once kissed his cousin, but that was as a dare,
You know the one that gave you a scare!.
Now everyday you sit at home, talking to his sisters on the phone!.
You miss him so much,
Rarely do you experience pain as such!.
All those good memories!.
The memories you will always cherish and keep!.
Of course you understand the here I am "you!."
You will know if this poem is for you, i love you too!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's a good poem!. Very interesting and thoughtful!. But I think you tried too hard to make it rhyme in a few areas!. Focus on the concept first, then make it rhyme when you edit it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It tells a story of a girl in love!. Poems like this are more personal than commercial!. It is hard to get a meter and keep the meaning you want to express!. Sometimes infrequently used vocabulary can express your thoughts with fewer words and help keep the poem meter!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think you asked the wrong question: apparently you want to show this poem to whomever the poem is talking about!. Go show him! Why can't you just tell him how you feel!? He obviously feels something sweet for you!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love the ending
its brilliantWww@QuestionHome@Com

it is awesome u should enter it in a contest really at least consider itWww@QuestionHome@Com

super good!. good job and good luck =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's good ^_^Www@QuestionHome@Com