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Question: Here is another poem i wrote!.!.!.my 3rd one :)!.!.!.tell me what you think and your favorite line if you like it!?
Sooner or later it will hit you,
You're losing the one man who you've said all those wonderful things to!.
You left me alone, abandoned,
My heart is freezing alone because forgotten!.
You've lied to yourself too many times,
Your true love soon shall expire!.
For not everything is a guarentee!.
You ran back to him after he left you,
Now he'll leave you again in time you will see!.
Night after night i feel empty inside; dead!
No bed can help me with the nightmares that I dread!.
Sooner or later again, my time will come,
For you to ask me back in your kingdom!.
But it will be too late for my heart is freezing slowly,
You turned off the fire of which i thought was something holy!.
I find myself sitting here writing poetry,
Love inspires, but also pain!.
All this, to you, looks like but a game!.
Playin with others hearts so we can feel the same pain!.
Well, I never did you wrong,
and i know because you ssaid it!.!.!.
If you lied to me then you lied to yourself
and you will regret it!.
I love you but with time it will fade,
So today is another day!.
Watch as my love will fade away,
into the night you say!? No!.
Into someone elses heart because you threw it away!.
But its okay I don't judge,
In the end i wont be sayin much!.
So just know that i loved you,
and you will regret!.
My heart is fading slowly!.
Something you said would never happen,
But now i feel soo lonely!.
Goodbye, Goodnight,
Goodmorning, hello!.
Where will my love take me know!?
I don't know!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Sooner or later it will hit you,

i dint know why, but the opening sentence is has to be the strongest!. Its a very bold statement and you can tell what you are going to write about!.

Over all, I think it is very good!. It expresses your sadness!. The comparison to other things like the kingdom is very good and makes a clear statement!.

I'm sorry about your break up, but if she went back to an ex, you deserve much better!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

My favorite line is "love inspires, but also pain!." The rest is a little too direct and not as artistic as I typically like!.

It certainly expresses emotion though, and the experience described is pretty common, so it may hold some appeal to others!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yeah it's good, a little rough but it's art so I won't go there!. Feel better soon bro!.Www@QuestionHome@Com