Let me know how this is? Written by me :)?

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Since the day we are born
We are one in the same
Nothing changes
Name to Name
Race to Race
Face to Face
We are one in the same!.

Yet we accuse
we abuse
we kill
we lie

Day to day
But nothing will change!.
Even if we are one in the same!.

You have your ideals
I have mine!.
Nothing to fight over!.

We stand face to face
One in the same
You say no
I say why
Just because your ideals
Differ from mine!.

From race to race
From name to name
We will stay one in the same!.

War to war
Nothing changes
Just another name

Another face
Another race
Another name
Another brother
Another Sister
Another Mother
Another Father
Another Son
Another Daughter
Gone, because this wont change!.

Death to death
We all end up the same!.
Face to face
Race to Race
Name to name
We are one in the same!.

Yet you dont stop!.
You wont change!.
Agree to change
and we wont end up the same!.

Since the day we are born
We will be one in the same
Name to Name
Face to Face
Race to Race
We will be one in the same

If we dont change!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

A song would be where this could lead!. The refrain would be the sequence with "another" If you want to keep in poem form, try to look at ways of restating the obvious, metaphors are a great tool!. Otherwise you words lose their effect!. What is not lost here is your emotion!. Keep at it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like this part!.
Another face
Another race
Another name
Another brother
Another Sister
Another Mother
Another Father
Another Son
Another Daughter
Gone, because this wont change!.
but i think putting mother&&brother next to each other would sound alot better!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it would be a good song!. if i ever use ill give 50% of the profitsWww@QuestionHome@Com

i agree with digger, i mean it kind of sounds like a rap song!.!.!.!.nice though!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is really coolWww@QuestionHome@Com