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Question: My teenaged student wrote this - what do you make of it!?
It's called "Stilts!."

The times have raised us up,
And so have those before us!.
Our stilts make us stand lanky and awkward,
But able to see all that may kill us below!.
We see the traps that ensnared fathers past,
And the mines that detonated on fathers past!.
Now we, with our height, step over them,
Yet having been born wearing stilts
Still does not allow us to use them with ease!.
We’d love to take strides as our fathers did,
But we stand hesitant,
For more traps,
More mines,
And more boulders
Are liable to ensnare us,
Set us ablaze,
Or trip us,
And a fall from mid heaven
Will surely bruise the face more
Than a fall from six feet from the ground!.
We’ve been made to look like circus performers
As our inexperience makes us wobble unsteadily,
And fathers past laugh at us,
But some try to extend a hand!.
Our stilts are too tall for us to reach down,
But we’ll grab hold of a reach from the ground -
Only if it’s with love!.


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It does not flow well, but other than that it is amazing!. Just the thoughts it portrays!.!.!. I cannot believe a teenager wrote that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

As far as an artistic eye!. It doesn't have a very good flow!. Its very choppy!. But it does have good metaphoric messages!. If I could decode it I would say the writer is speaking of stilts as if it is an avantage, being able to learn from people in the past and the mistakes they made, but knowing that new things may arise that may be a challenge and looking for help from the older and wiser who love them!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's not bad, but it would need some more refinement to be really good!. It sounds like teenage poetry to me!. Good teenage poetry, but teenage nonetheless!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It almost seems to be a bit politically charged, but that may just be my interpretation!. At parts the flow is a little broken but for a teen I'd say its good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

not ethical to post!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Wow!. That's!.!.like!.!.!.pure art!Www@QuestionHome@Com

its good :DWww@QuestionHome@Com