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Question: Poem: fallen out of reach!?
the smell of roses fills my lungs
i taste sweet honey suckle on my tongue
the warm grass caresses my back
i watch as the sky fades into a ultramarine black
i stare at the stars in the sky
and tears fill my eyes
i wonder which one is you
do you still know who you belong too!?
do you ponder over our shattered dreams
and our goals that we never did meet!?
about our talk of future bliss
i must admit, you stole my soul with just one kiss
i know you had to take some time to find out who you really are
but this time apart
has left so many scars


you've fallen out of reach
and now i truly see
how much you really mean to me
how could i be so naive!?
to just let you up and leave
i feel so alone and scared
i just can not bare
you not being here
i need you near
to come back to me
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I think that is really good!. And if I understand it correctly you are talking about a loved one that died, or about of family member dieing!. It's really good!. I would only suggest that for the last part, you were rhyming like too much and through the poem off balance!. But, otherwise it was really good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

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