..do you like this poem?

Question: !.!.do you like this poem!?

i just wrote it!. im not the best!.!.but what do you think!? it needs a title and needs editing!.!.any suggestions!? thanks oh&&btw im 11!.

Nature is like life!. Or like people, their personalities, and how we change!.
Like the wind that moves in all directions and different ways!.
Whether it’s a gentle breeze or strong gusts throughout a hurricane!.
Some people are like trees that grow bigger and stronger!.
They change a lot throughout their lifetime, whether good or even bad!.
Or maybe rain!.
Rain that’s cold and wet, and falls gently until it crashes onto the ground!.
There’s also the sun, the sun that no matter what doesn’t fail to bring light to every single lonely person!.
As you can see, we’re all different!. Different lifestyles and emotions!.
Yet we know that no matter what the challenge we manage to hold up and stay strong!.
Period!.
-Caitlyn Ham!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Your free verse is nice, but I have a few suggestions to shorten it if I may!? In order to catch and hold a readers attention the sentences need to at least relate and not be too long, so that they get bored with the read!. Impatience is prevalent in poetry!. If I may show you here:

Nature, like life, people, their personalities, and how they change!.
Compare to the wind moving in all directions and ways, a gentle breeze, a strong gust, or a hurricane!.
Some are like trees and grow big and strong, with many changes, some good, some bad!.
Then compare some people to rain, cold, wet, falling gently, then crashing madly to the ground!
Feel the warmth of the sun, some people we can compare in that they never fail to bring light to every single lonely person!.
As in nature, we all start as a seed, and mature in different ways, by lifestyle, emotion, yet no matter the challenge, we hold up and stay stronger!.
-Caitlyn Ham

As I stated, no offense meant, it is your verse, only trying to help with a little rewording!. I would name it LIfe; according to Caitlyn!. Thanks for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it! I think it's great that you were able to write that so quckly and have it be so good!

Oh, and thanks for complementing my poem! And, I do have more about my cousin and our little spat!. If you want to read them, feel free to email me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very subjegated, feels rough to the mind and extremely hard to follow, nice imagery and emotion though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

goes all over the place
perhaps tie all he loose ends with!.!.!.!. nature!? thats the subject right!? or ppl,!? thats whats confusing!.!.!. to make it flow more smoothly

unlss its a free verse in which case its fine, i just dont care for them ;)Www@QuestionHome@Com

its good but i suggest you maybe leave a little bit more to the imagination and not use as many full sentences

but good imagery!Www@QuestionHome@Com

My instructor would love it!. He doesn't really like mine cause I write more like musical artists but he likes the comparison type!. It has no rhyme which is awfully hard to pull off!. Kudos!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's great for your age! Keep it up (:
And a suggestion, maybe make it a little easier to follow!.
This is alot better than I could do!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I really like it, art wow! your only 11 the only thing I would change is make the spacing more creative to add more like emotion if that makes sence -PS 'thnx for answering my question C =Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow!. Its really good!.
Are you sure you're 11!?!? =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. Lost of emotion!. Keep writing

Thanks for the answer btwWww@QuestionHome@Com

For an 11 year old it's a great start!. Keep it up!Www@QuestionHome@Com

if youve actually got a comment for it post it but please dont spam on mineWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's okWww@QuestionHome@Com

really good:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

cute =PWww@QuestionHome@Com

Thats really good for an 11 year old!. keep it up :DWww@QuestionHome@Com

nice imagery!.!.makes you think!. i like it : )Www@QuestionHome@Com

Free Verse!? Well, never been fond of those, but this is sorta okay!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Pretty pedestrian and clichéed to tell you the truth !. You need to read lots of poetry to get the hang of it and some inspiration !

These to share:

"For certain ones what was written may come true :
They shall live on in the distance
At the mouths of rivers!.

For our ones, no!. They will re-enter
Dryness that was heaven on earth to them,
Happy to eat the scones baked out of clay!.

For some, perhaps, the delta’s reed-beds
And cold bright-footed seabirds always wheeling!.
For our ones, snuff

And hob-soot and the eat off ashes!.
And a judge who comes between them and the sun
In a pillar of radiant house-dust!."
(Seamus HEANEY)( Irish poet)

"Do not go gentle into that good night,

Old age should burn and rave at close of day ;

Rage, rage, against dying of the light

Tough wise men at their end know dark is right,

Because their words had forked no lightning they

Do not go gentle into that good night!.

Good men, the last wave by, crying how bright

Their frail deeds might have danced in a green bay

Rage, rage against dying of the light

Wild men who caught and sang the sun in flight,

And learn, too late, they grieved it on its way,

Do not go gentle into that good night!.

Grave men, near death, who see with blinding sight

Blind eyes could blaze like meters and be gay,

Rage, rage against the dying of the light!.

And you, my father, there on the sad height,

Curse, bless, me now with your fierce tears, I pray!.

Do not go gentle into that good night!.

Rage, rage against the dying of the light!."

( Dylan Thomas)( Welsh poet --- like your name !.!.!.:-))

keep writing,*catie baby, that's the only way!! Go for it!

( did not think 11y olds were allowed on this site!?!?!?)

* poe : who is your publisher may I ask!?Www@QuestionHome@Com