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Question: An old working, I am re-publishing - thought's!?
A White Light!.
A shallow grave uncovered,
A mangled body of blood,
A bone twisted and torn,
A life washed away in the flood!.
An eye mirrored in torture,
A grip tightened in foul play,
A mind innocent now strained,
A face shoved in the clay!.
A vein severed by blade,
A place cursed and forgotten,
With thoughts it did rotten!.
The story now has an end,
Stop digging he just might,
The soul has bounced forward,
Towards a shiny white light!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I'd say that such poem would make the proper song for Pink Floyd !. Dark!.!. descriptive !.!. missing some balance & rhyming!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

naff

sorry

all those lines beginning with 'A'

try reading a bit more published poetry and see what makes it and what doesn'tWww@QuestionHome@Com