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Question: Is the battle breathtaking enough!?
Trial of Sight
Part Eighteen
“Tonight I will taste sweet blood,”
tha dark voice whispered
Cara froze
but only for an instant
before she brought her hand down
upon the weapon aimed to slay her
“You have taken blood without consent
FAR too many times before,”
Her words came shocking
even to her own ears
The blade, in her hand, rose up
Her blind-sight gift from a witch
aiding in her aim
piercing flesh of Demon Wolf
“Taste your own damn blood”
she spat and drove her knife further…
-This is STILL not the end… but there are very few left to go… the repetition at the beginning is simply for clarification of the identity of the voice from the previous poem… I would like to know your thoughts on how this one works in the series!. Usually, my endings are week… I hope this one is better than my others…
Blessed Be in Justice and Love and Light, SirenWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Cara is showing great courage - in the face of her adversary - while having a handicap of blindness!. Shows great strength of character!. Question: where did she put her hand on the weapon!? not on the blade (I hope)!. If it was aimed to slay her - how did she get a hold - of the hilt - in order to drive the knife in!? ?Www@QuestionHome@Com
See, this has the feel of something I would write, only not as good as you, of course!. There I go, stroking the ego!. To answer the question, yes, the battle is breathtaking enough!. People don't realize it, especially in the action movies, but the words said should be minimal, and there should be no monologuing!. You brought this out quite well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Breathtaking is the right word!. I read it quickly at first to find out what would happen, then again slowly to savor the words you use!. This series is your best yet!. Your storytelling skill is developing with each new one and this story is captivating and intense!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com