A reposted trigee? What do you think?

Question: A reposted trigee!? What do you think!?

This is my first attempt!.

We sit here crying!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Inside these cold grey walls
For our lost father,!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Green suits approach the door,
But he is gone, gone!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.So sudden is the news!.
To a place that we cannot follow!.!.!.!.!.!.!.We hope you like heaven, daddy!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I think you did an excellent job, though I am not any where near the master (creator)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Thats really good! (Much better than I can do!.) Keep working on it and it will be perfect!

Good luck, I hope I helped!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow !. Im speachless!.

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