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Question: Do you like my really short poem!?
im only 14, and wrote this in a really short time!.

Down a windy road,
you see forests green,
mountains cold!.
Why cant you stop to smell the rose!?

You strive to live,
clouded vision,
death comes!.

stop a moment,
before all is lost,
soul is torn,
memories gone

life is short,
why not stop to smell the rose!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Ur really short poem is lot better than Ur short poem!.
a better rhythm & better rhyme !.!.
however!.!. U may need to add some spices!.!. s!.a
mountains DRIPPING cold!.
It is cool!.!. keep on writing !.!. U 'v got the talent !.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's a lovely poem! I like it very much; my only comment would be to take the word "green" out and say something like
Down a windy road
you see forests warmth
mountains cold!.
Why can't you stop to smell the rose!?

How's that!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good poem !. also good rhythmWww@QuestionHome@Com

this is really cool im 14 and no where near writing a poem this good!.!.!.!. you can get a carrer with this =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very muddly, neither fish nor fowlWww@QuestionHome@Com

That is a very good poem!!! Keep up the good work!Www@QuestionHome@Com