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Everything She Was

As each day goes by she is holding her breath
The lump in her throat and the beat in her chest
Grows bigger and faster as tears fill her eyes
She hits the cold floor and her life passes by

Flash after flash the white light blinds
Her blood shot eyes and aching mind
She can’t see nor think what to do now
So she huddles up with her face in the ground

One little voice inside of her mind
Takes everything, all of her life
Everything that she has to do
All that she is, all of her use

Her future is lost along with her dreams
Who knows who she was supposed to be!?
Life was too tough and she wanted to be free
That girl gave up on you and on meWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
WoW!
Very emotional, honest, and beautiful!
Really good job!!
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wow!.!. very sweet, emotional and sincer everything you need in a poem !. Good Job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i really like the begining and the strong endingWww@QuestionHome@Com