"The Carousel" Thoughts please?

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Carousel

The Carousel whirls
Its frail familiarity
Leaves me stricken
The mirrored glass
Reflects my pain
It moves once more
And I am chosen
Bound among faux
Flax colored strands
The rise and fall
Your gold impalements
A beautiful guise
A visage that cracked
Revealing the truth
Your sour perfume
It’s all too human
It has broken me
Now I beg for exit
From wide eyed gazes
Dead black orbs
Perpetually frozen
Where nothing changes
Unrelenting Carousel
Nausea in my pit
Your dizzying spectacle
Of earnest tricks
And spiraling lights
Of sharpening tings
That ring in my throat
Sending epileptic vibes
Through my finger tips
Your hypnotic gaze
Drew out my naivety
And it’s much too late
I chose to stay
I’ll reap the consequenceWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

The Blue Room,

If this is what you hack out, you would scare me on the level of a daily basis!.!.!. sometimes when I read soliloques like these on YA, I cringe because each stanza pulls you in a different direction and when the end comes, it's so far away from the start that it ain't even in the same zip code! You definitely show them how it's done!.!.!. Grade AAA ++Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Well you already heard what I got to say from your previous post!. So all I have to say is!.!.!. It's Bloody Good!.

WELL DONE!
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P!.S: I told you, you would have a better respons at this time!.
It was completely dead earlier, when you posted your last one!. It's 2: 58 am in Australia right now!. I'll say good night as I am going to bed soon!. CYAWww@QuestionHome@Com

Powerful imagery, familiar yet bizarre, makes this an outstanding poem!. The lines flow gracefully and there is careful clarity in the meaning!. I love this!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Thoughts of broken heart!.!.dark pictures drawn by a Scorpio!.!. They love so much!.!. willing to live in pain!.!.and reap the consequences !.!.which is nothing but more pain!. wow!Www@QuestionHome@Com