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Question: Critique my poem please!.!?
Should I leave this all behind!?
All that we have made,
Or should I stay just for a while!?
Repair what has been broken!.

If I stay,
Will I gain, or lose it all!.
If I go,
Will I recover, or only get worse!.

It’s true, I love you,
But still, I see all you have destroyed,
My friends, they hate you,
They don’t see the happiness you bring!.

It’s hard to choose one’s destiny,
This simple choice, not simply made,
If I go I will miss you,
But if I stay, will I regret it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
that's really good!. i agree, it could deffinetely be a song!. but if you want critique!.!.!.you could add a rhyme or 2 to emphasize the most important lines!. but then again it works without any rhyme because it's about pain!. so whatever you think!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The question in all relationships!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Am I better off "with" or "without" this person!. And yes, a simply choice but not simply made!.

I suggest different punctuation in your first stanza:
Or should I stay just for a while;
repair what has been broken!?

And in your second stanza as well:
If I stay,
will I gain, or lose it all!?
If I go,
will I recover, or only get worse!?

Simply stated, flows really well, no chunks or hangups to break the flow of what you are saying!. The reader just has a nice read!. Excellent work!.
What will you title it!?
I can offer "Soul Searching"Www@QuestionHome@Com

woah! thats deep!.!.!.make that a song ;)

i like it cause it makes you really thinkWww@QuestionHome@Com

the title should be:
who's the fool
but i like it
good job laneyWww@QuestionHome@Com

NiceWww@QuestionHome@Com