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Question: What do you think of this poem!?!.!.!.!.i don't really like this one but lets see what you think!!?
Everyday
The smell is fresh and clean
The air crisp and warm
The silence of the still air
Is overwhelming
As the cool breeze blows
my hair flows with the wind
And the breeze blows my skirt
The birds begin to chirp
As new life is approaching
They are small
But make such a loud noise
The feeling of spring is here
And begins to engulf my body
Take in the air and relax
All is at ease
the bees are buzzing
The squirrels are scampering
And the birds are singing
A lovely song
I only wish
It could be like this
everydayWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I love it!. The imagery is lovely and one image flows gently and gracefully into the next!. The feeling that this poem imparts is so uplifting and there is an innocent happiness in the words!. I have to say again, I love this!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
As to the theme, it is very nostalgic!. It connects to existential realities in my life!. It is a relaxing poem!. Soothing!.
As to the imagery, it is not bad!. However, your words it seems are trite!. You can opt for more unique metaphors for your first line, "The smell is fresh and clean!."
As to the flow of the poem, it is nice that it is parenthetical with "everyday"!. It evokes an idea of wholeness on the writer -- that the idea of everyday is a satisfying longing!.
As to the metaphysics of the poem, it is always a delight to make room for the expectation that a "new life is approaching" amidst the frenzy!. Very noble intentions!.
If I was a professor, I'd give this poem a 1!.9Www@QuestionHome@Com
Hi!. I like that the title coincides with the last line!. However, I felt that the only message behind it was that you thought it was a beautiful day!. My point is, I think you're good at writing but you shouldn't waste your time with shallow thoughts!.!.!.
Post Script: I'm not trying to be overly critical!. It's just my opinionWww@QuestionHome@Com
It has a greatclimb through the wording, fantastic iamery and an alomost nicety throughout the condence of the flow!. Well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is very pretty, and I can only agree with every word!Www@QuestionHome@Com