I know, it needs a lot of work!. but, you know how sometimes when you wrote the poem, you cant quite pinpoint what is wrong with it/how to fix it!? well, id very much appreciate your help =)
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Dancing in the rain
Or spies in her shower
We sure could entertain
And we still have that power
We’re connected at the ear
Connected at the mind
Our friendship is sincere
We’re kind of entwined
We’ve been through some trials
They’ve been thick and thin
But we came out with smiles
And closer within
We talk about boys
And life, school, God
We can make a lot of noise
We’re actually pretty odd
We sure can’t dance
But she can sing
When I get the chance
I tell her everything
I share with her my soul
And she does the same
There’s not even a toll
No silly liar’s game
We totally “get” each other
And it’s weird – out connection
She understands my crazy logics
With no further inspection
We have some fun codes
About anything you think of
We’ve been on life’s roadWww@QuestionHome@Com