I am not good at this. How can I improve this Trigee?

Question: I am not good at this!. How can I improve this Trigee!?

Whoopee in the Storm #2
by Elaine P

Lightning and thunder!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.rain pouring down
the night torn asunder!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Nature's wrath abounds
Whoopie is crying!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.trembling in fear
"I think I'm dying"!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.I wish morning were here!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

This is almost perfect!. To me, I agree with removing 'the!.' also, I think S-2 L-2 is one beat too long!. "Nature's wrath found!." Something like that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Just a few minor amendments!.!.!.!.hope you don't mind!.

Electrical energy and reverberations in the heavens!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
the period of celestial lightloss lacerated on sundran!.!.!.!.!.!.
Cry of Delight is left lamenting!.!.!.!.!.!.
"I conjecture that I am expiring"!.!.!.!.!.
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Precipitation waterfalling to a lower plane
Unregenerated life's irascibility proliferates again
Pusillanimously quaking here
I desire that the pre-noon appear
!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.only joking!!!

Trigee seems perfect to me, it fulfills all the criteria!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Never read a poem of yours that needed help, this reads well
as I see it, Yet i think, "I think I am dying" doesn't fit, Just seems too strong, More like in a storm, such as this one feels
it will never end!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm not great at critiquing, but, I think this is fine as is!. You paint a picture of a storm and Whoopee's reaction to it!. also I sense storms bother you a bit too!. Great job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's wonderfully fun!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. Why doubt what you write
Sweet baby hun!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.you'll regret it left & right
You know it's so good!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.All the words in their place
Rhymes like it should!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Like ladies dressed up in lace

nfd?

Wish I could right like you!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

You may as well have asked;
"How do I improve on perfection"!?

You don't, leave it alone!.

huggles n squeezles!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think you do this quite well!. This is an interesting poetic form and completely new to me!. Your poem has explained the form as well as capturing Whoopie's fears!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This trigee is acutally quite good, especially since each poem actually flows well and has rhyme!. Very nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Let me get into the poet until morning!.

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I love Whoopee and your poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's only me!.!.!.!.but I think it's great!!!
I really like Fishi's too, especially the "dressed up in lace" part!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think its great as it is!. It certainly works!. Good Job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You most certainly are good at this! It's a great Trigee!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You've done it girl, keep up the good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love it!.!.!.needs no improvement! Poor Whoopie :(Www@QuestionHome@Com