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Question: Not that good, please help on improving!?
I lock you away in a cage
And throw away the key
Saying it's better this way
But then
You end up escaping
Somehow
Everyone becomes frightened
Including me!.!.!.but it's funny
In a way, too
You are called anger
Fun but dangerous
But I love you anyway
sorry i am terrible at spelling as you can seeWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I don't think I can improve on an expression of personal feelings!.
It can be difficult but very cathartic to write when you are upset, if you feel it needs improvement go back to it when you have calmed down, reflect on your emotions and let those feelings flow into your poem!.
And please 'lil shawty' I don't know how old you are but stop knocking yourself!.
I don't see the spelling mistakesWww@QuestionHome@Com
I see you are having problems
with keeping someone in a place
You locked the person up
threw away the key
No matter what is done
he or she will continue to escape
from a cage that is confining!.
Being locked up a person would have anger
People including you felt frightened
however you accepted the person
because it says I love you anyway
Final note I don't see any spelling mistakes!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Once you revise the spelling, its a decent poem!.
The reveal at the end is quite brilliant!.
I would try to add 1 or 2 more stanzas, and try to incorporate some simile or metaphor!.!.!.
But otherwise well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Try using spell check and adding at least one more stanz to it!. It is not a bad start!
Keep at it!!!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
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