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Question: Anyone want to say a few words for the deceased!?
Flakes of corn cereal & coffee
Televised news of many folks' flooded houses
News delivered shortly & softly!.!.!.
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Creatures calling from the wild
The deceased delivered to the doorstep of my house
This morning, I've buried a child!.
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A spade was played to lift dirt & clay
Twigs formed naturally into the shape of a cross
Leaves tossed to the side of where the dead does lay
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Would I have gotten the same sort of peaceful burial!.!.!.
If I had come any closer to suicide the other day
I wonder who might have had what to sayWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Yes it is a sad poem, but written well!. Like a funeral dirge in a way!. It has good visuals!. Flows well!. Very good job!. Thanks for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its good -
personally i prefer sad poems to end with, or contain somewhere, a note of hope or something positive!.

we shd be positive if poss even after tragedy - so we can move forward!.
we need to climb out of the lake of misery!. - so we can contribute more to life!.
gd luck -Www@QuestionHome@Com