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Question: Just a little something i wrote!. let me know what you think!?
Unforgiveable Sins


Ive been blinded by the fear in my eyes
and its something i cannot hide
because every time i try i just wanna break down and cry!.
Every now and then i just wanna kneel down and say
forgive me father for i have sinned
i'm so blinded by the fear i cant even say where ive been
or where i am going or who i will be
that is one future i cannot see!.
One by one they create a pain in me
what the hell could it be!.
Like a blind man walking i feel so lost
i gave something up but is it really worth the cost
of knowing that i will never be the same,
i will never be happy even in fame!.
My heart is pounding and it hurts so much
and i feel so scared because i know i'm s--- outa luck!.
But then i stop and wonder what the hell am i saying!?
theres not even a reason for me to be blaming
anyone for that they said, did, or gave
becasue in the end its me myself who dug my grave!.
Whats really in the depths of my heart!?
Damn i cant even start
to say what i feel
i dont know, do you!? no!? then get up and go!.
I love you , but i feel worse than when i started
its almost as if i'm a moving target!.
One by one the arrows peirce
my back with a feeling so fierce!.
Why do you have to do this to me!?
But the fact remains one feeling stays free!.
It looks so beautiful like a released dove
what i will always feel for you will always be love!.
Back to the problem that i have framed
that make it feel like ive severed a main vain
and now i'm in pain!.
I'm learning to deal and learning to feel
my heart is no longer made of steel!.
I'm no longer falling off a cliff
i no longer feel hard or even stiff!.
The fact reamains, I know where Ive been
and for that i must say,
Forgive me father for i have sinned!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow!
Talk about a wake up call!. Nice one!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Whoa!.
You have awesome poem skills!.
If you are not catholic I choose not to present that to another, but although, that is such a cool poem!
Thanks!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Actually it's amazing!!!Keep writing,u can even be a good poet!!!why not!!Like mum always say:"The afternoon knows what the morning never expected!!!"Good luck dude & have a nice wonderfull day!!See ya!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Were you fondled by a priest!? Keep writing through the pain in your booty hole!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com