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Question: Poem critique: be alright!?
in my darkest hour of desperation
i find my motivation
through self deprecation
by picking myself apart
i will be alright
this time, i will be alright
i find solace in the charity of my madness
my sorrow, once listless now is manifesting it's munificence



i carry on with this ponderous freight
although my destiny replicates
the yearning inside my heart
which drives me only so far
until i learn to comprimise
with my own demise
my pain wont subside
until i learn to hollow the anguish i feel
only then will my aching spirit begin to heal
the bequest promised in gratuity by my fate
for never once starting to contemplate
or renegotiate
what was meant to be, for it will be
even in spite of meWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Brilliant lines:
in my darkest hour of desperation
i find my motivation

with the juxtaposition of the final couplet
what was meant to be, for it will be
even in spite of me

You condense the journey to perfection!. Well done!.
T!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

so deep!.!.!.i love it! its absolutely beautiful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ya!.!.!. Stay safe!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is BRILLIANT! You are SO talented girl!
I wish you peace and strength!. Hang in there! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

OMG I loved this!. I felt my eyes water!. This is so deep and moving yet so sd a nd depression but very good!! Good JobWww@QuestionHome@Com