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Question: ~ A rondeau!.!.!.a Poem of Summer!.~!?
Here is a rondeau!.!.!.as it is rather strict in meter, etc!., it may be a bit gramatically incorrect!.!.!.here 'tis:
She sang softly, up the deep stair--
Ancient and cracked!. With creeping care
And a puzzling thought, she upon
The frail steps walked, whispering songs
She sang softly;
And an enchanting sort of tread
She detected, above--ahead;
He paused and listened, dreaming, as
She sang softly!.
A hundred worlds passed o'er the stone
Of that castle, and left it alone!.
An hourglass, with no sand or silt,
Told him yet listening and still
She sang softly!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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I like any poem set in an old house, and this is wrought with a musical ear!. I am not exactly sure if I recognise it as a rondeau, but there have been several variants of this form in different countries, and in several poetic and musical traditions, including a few revivals!. I question nothing, but your word-choice in one-and-a-half places: `detected' and possibly `sort of,' and the possibility of a colon at the end of the penultimate line!. A most enjoyable re-and-read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is a truly beautiful poem!. However, it is not a rondeau!. Not only does a rondeau have a strict meter, which you hit dead on, might I add, but it has a very strict rhyme scheme!. The rondeau is built like this
a
a
b
b
a
a
a
b
Refrain
a
a
b
b
a
Refrain
The refrain is not repeated in the first verse, and there are only two rhyming sounds throughout the entire poem!.
However, on a note of sheer poetic beauty, I would definitely advise you to keep this one!. Your meter is beautiful, lyrics haunting, a melody with message!. Classify it as a free verse, and you have one of the best poems I've seen on this site!. Blessed Be!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Rondeau or not, it is lovely! Thank you for sharing!. ?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Love it!. good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com