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Position:Home>Poetry> What do you think of this poem? I wrote it after 3 days of no sleep. Honesty pleQuestion: What do you think of this poem!? I wrote it after 3 days of no sleep!. Honesty please!? Hand in hand, metal to flesh, no words need to be spoken
Nothing needs to be said!. Slowly breathing, eyes decieving, we're not dreaming The world IS screaming Feel your heart beating, hold your last breath Now smile for the camera, and pose for your death Fingers getting nearer, bullets smash the mirror, don't worry my dear Now everything's clearerWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: To clear up the confusion maybe as a last verse you could add something like: When they were found,their hands entwined, no mystery to solve,they were of the same frame of mine!. Or something of the sort, to explain it a small amount, but not give it all away!. It is a great poem, love the clandestine aspect to it!. Thanks for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com i totally love this it sounds like something I'd write, which is totally weird because i have a very strange witting style!. anyways AWESOME POEM!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com Some interesting lines the rhythm needs a little work-better than most!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I like it though everything is not clear!. Thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Interesting indeed, not dark nor happy, strange but no real meaning!. I like it!Www@QuestionHome@Com good lines kinda depressing thoughWww@QuestionHome@Com I really like it!!Www@QuestionHome@Com I think it is a very good poem!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com i like itWww@QuestionHome@Com its a bit on the gruesome side for me sorryWww@QuestionHome@Com sounds good keep going (p!.s!. did not get the ending)Www@QuestionHome@Com holy crap!!!!!!!! that is the best poem i have read and i truly mean that!!!!!!!!!!good greef! i-i- just wwoooooooooow!Www@QuestionHome@Com great i like email me more of them please = leerayprice@yahoo!.comWww@QuestionHome@Com |