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Position:Home>Poetry> Minimalist Poetry (Min Poe) no 2, Care to comment?Question: Minimalist Poetry (Min Poe) no 2, Care to comment!? Jellz' Min Poe Society is now open for membership!.!.!.!.
Sands of time Sand Everywhere Dunes Rising Deserted Footprints Sinking No Escape Quick Help Somebody Lost Only Wanted Sandpit Friends Play Here Found! Bucket Check Spade Check Fun Check Castles!Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I know exactly what you mean!. My in-laws are the "all work, no play" type of people (if you are anything else you are lazy and unsuccessful to their standards!.) Needless to say, we don't see eye to eye!. I'd rather have fun!. Hence the reason we are preparing for the big move next year to be ocean-side every day!!Www@QuestionHome@Com I've never written this style, so I'm not so sure if I'm the best to comment!. I like how one word leads to the next, and it sort of jumps from the impression of being at sand dunes, to sinking in jungle quicksand, to playing in a sandbox, and finally making sand castles along the sea!. Yes, I suppose sand touches all of our lives in some way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com A few less words would help! lol Well said, my compliments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Haha!! sinking!!! YAY!! oh!? Not Sinking!!!?!? Not Funny!! OK!.!.!. A little bit funny/////!! I'll play but sinking was way funner!Www@QuestionHome@Com |