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Question: So what you think about my poem!?
Life goes on as if it never ends!.!.!.
They thought you've nothing to change
But what a stupid bunch!

You've to take the bull by horns
Even you'll feel lost up with hols
Nothing will stop!.!.!.
But i'm still behind you!

Look out !!
There's a secret to find out
Don't burden me by your worries
I know yu ennemy
He can put you in his bull's eyes
So you must fight him wherever he flies
This little fatuous can lie
So don't think twice & be more wise

I can make you feel like bull in a China-shop
But i don't like it a lot this silly plot
You're swimming in a dark ocean all alone
Where you can't stand by your one!.!.!.
But someday you'll see a blast of wistle
It'll save you from darkness
And take you off from your sadness

What about facing the truth!?
What about giving me your hands!?
I can make you see the land!.!.!.
I'm your last hope!.!.!.!!
So believe this isn't any more a testemony
So please my prince!.!.!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
For me it jumps a little to much and is hard to follow!. But line 16 till the end is pretty good i think!. Good Luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com

You used too many cliches!. It's sort of elementary and it rambles!.

Sorry!. !.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's sort of incoherent!. Try to correct your grammar and maybe eliminating some cliches!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

nice!.!. !.Www@QuestionHome@Com

stupendous!Www@QuestionHome@Com