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Question: Poem critique: fallen!?
i wrote this when i was either 16 or 17

What grace is so callous to rape the world of its humanity!?
What love is so abhorrent that it would tolerate such carelessness!?
To look at the skin and bathe in vanity
To take pride in a cause based on barefaced maliciousness
To watch a whole flock of earthbound doves being poisoned by distorted individuals
Shot and burned and the agony was perpetual
Has the nexus of Hell arisen from the unfathomable abyss of the underworld to scorch the land!?
Has our dear brother Lucifer shrouded his self in the blankets of a born tyrant!?
Or has the entire world fallen from our God’s hands!?
And led the universe in a downward spiral towards the lands of the vile and violent!?
Such angst we have for ourselves but never for others
For the whole world watched as an entire people were smothered
But because the eyes can’t hide what the mouth won’t say
Those hideous souls that departed replay over and over again in the souls of the knowing
Tears are not a conduit for remorse when depravity was allowed to carry on everyday
Only grave prayer can lead to such a desired redemption until all abominations are showing
We have fallen indeed from a graceful flight
We have fouled ourselves in the twinkling of the night
We have permitted flagrancy to run rapid and create an onslaught of deaths
Fallen angels
With broken halos
Cry for mercy in their crestfallen heart’s depths
Lucifer has plunged to earth once again
In hopes that we will glorify all of our sins
But no transgression is so heinous that lives would be took
Souls would be shook
Compulsive murderers would be hooked
For we have fallen
We have fallenWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
holy crap this is freakin aweosome! u really know how to write! well i'd say keep on writing cuz ur super good at it, damn i wish i cud write like u lol!. man just keep on writin and i wanna hear more from u! lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

that poem!MAN:)that is one amazing poem that sounds like it truly came from the heart and i am glad to kno someone writes poetry also:):):):):):)Www@QuestionHome@Com

WOW! Really good and deep!Www@QuestionHome@Com