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Position:Home>Poetry> How's this? (Short poem/song)?Question: How's this!? (Short poem/song)!? My-I beautiful lover may not you-u cry
Beautiful lover may not you-u die I cry for you daily May not you hear my whimpers, baby My once beautiful lover has cried My once beautiful lover has died It's very short!. And it's more of a poem than I song!. It reminds me of Sweeney Todd a bit:] It's supposed to be short!. It's sopposed to be sad also!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Good job :) could use a tiny bit more work though!.!.!.not to be overly critical though!.!.keep writing, you'll be an amazing writer one day if you do!. i would make the poem a little bit more descriptive or make it more catching!. so its clear!. but good work :)Www@QuestionHome@Com It is very sad, especially if it is based on a true love and experienceWww@QuestionHome@Com Its okay, the first parts a bit confusing!. It would be great if it was longer!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |