A poem i wrote last night please read?

Question: A poem i wrote last night please read!?

I wrote this last night do you like it!? its meant to be mysterious and scary!.!.!.

The Wrinkled Mirror

Its face covered and clouded
as victims aware of its truth
in beauty the misery shrouded
to wrench your innocence and youth!.

Children would sit to look
in the mirror that wrinkled with raconteur
through hypnosis their youth it took
standing in deceit and grandeur!.

Hope and happiness it drew
from a paralyzed audience taken
in a dieing gaze they knew
of youth they were forsaken!.

The mirrors cloak was gone
in venturing eyes the darkness spoke
inside a world of phenomenon
as wrinkled hands would reach out to choke!.

Shattered hands through the mirror break
blood drops stains the floor
where children sit needless to take
the mirrors reaping of youth evermore!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I like this poem!. You made the mirror a creature that gives fear and devours!. I shiver with that realization sometimes when I gaze at myself; one day that face of mine will be wrinkled and (edit) worn, my youth made memory!. Scary thought!. I like how you extended that fear into something even more eerily fantastic!.
I give this poem a
creepy 8!.9Www@QuestionHome@Com

It needs polishing and pruning, the rhyming is added and forced, not integral and you have clearly spent far too much ntime on it and thereby lost the plot!.
It barely rhymes and in so doing makes no sense!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

interesting, but not sure i get it totally!. how old are you!?
it seems about someone trying to look in a mirror and see that their youth has gone!.
that happens to me all the time lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

I prefer the earlier versions where fear is not part of the picture!.

This is good though!. I know if I ever find one of those weird mirrors at a house of mirrors in a carnival -- I'm staying away!.
T!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Umm, i don't see the passion you usually have, but it was still very good, you have one of the best vocabularies i have every seen!. Nice!.!.!.

!.!.~?*RaeRae*?~!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

and before this mirror takes away
this beauty and regardless youth,
i'll look back and smile to this day,
as the mirror unfolds my truth!.!.!.it's no use!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Quite good, work on evening the meter out to make it flow better and perhaps be more descriptive and not so ambigious!. Not bad as it is though!. Good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow!. that was really quite deep!. im impressed
it was v!.mysteriousWww@QuestionHome@Com

Sorry, for me its meaningless !.!.!.!. and far too long anyway!. Sorry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its amazing its fits what u want and its amazing how each stanza is written with every other line rymes amazing !. if alot of ur poems are like this u could b the next edgar allen poeWww@QuestionHome@Com

:D Lovely, and better than most of the poetry I read here!.!.!.XDWww@QuestionHome@Com

I really like it! It's creepy in a beautiful way!. Keep up the good work!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i really like!!!!:)Www@QuestionHome@Com