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Position:Home>Poetry> Rate my [poem]?Question: Rate my [poem]!? Ode to death
Such an awful pain Ode to death Is it all for fame!? Ode to death Terribly cruel Ode to death Is it that cool Ode to the doomed Who shall life for them end Ode to the doomed Who soon will be dead Ode to the doomed Who can’t decide Ode to the doomed Who turn to suicideWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: its ok, i think you focused too much on the rhyming though!. but i always think that poetry cant be judged so much really, especially when about such personal thoughts!. if you know someone who this seems to be about, im sorry god bless!. anyway, it really isnt bad, but if you write more in the future, and then look back on this(because you will only get better), if there is a way to fix it, you'll find itWww@QuestionHome@Com Too much rhyming! All poems don't have to rhyme!. Some of the best poems don't rhyme !. !. !. the author uses imagery, assonance, alliteration, personification, similies, metaphores, and juxtaposition!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I think it could use some more devices (i!.e!. metaphors) and maybe some imagery- that would work well!. also, I don't think the use of the word "cool" fits the poem in this context!.Www@QuestionHome@Com "Who shall life for them end" sounds a bit awkward!. So are your alluding to celebrity suicide!?Www@QuestionHome@Com |