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Thanks for a great poem that comes to a point expressing the perennial human condition and the idea that time heals all wounds!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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I don't think you're really using the whole 'broken clock' idea to its fullest potential!. I see that you're personifying the clock as you, but I think you should write something free verse (from that 'lying clock's perspective) that rather, reflects how you are feeling, you know!?

Your formula (adj / A / B / A) starts to sound too repeated!.

I found it interesting how in the first stanza all of the lines began with the letter 'A'

I think that you're trying to convey how a clock outwardly is just a physical object, but it measures something more: time!. You think you're something more than you appear and you need a second chance (!?)!.

Good concept, I would play around with it a little more!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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It's a good poem but you only bring the clock in at the end so I think it would be better if you got rid of the clock!.!.!.but it's ur choice! The meaning!.!.!.I'm pretty sure!.!.!.is that ur lost and alone and it feels like no one even cares!. This is a very good poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Random
lines breaks do
not a poem

make!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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I love your writing!. I dont understand though what is has to do with a clcok , but i think it means your heart!?! But its REALLY good!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

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