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Question: Judge poem plz!!!!!!!!!?
this is my preposition poem plz judge it but dont be toooooooo mean!!!
ESCAPE
above the creaky floor
next to the burning light
according to the famished mosquitos
underneath them lay an appetizing course
before they could dig in
upon them a rectangular monster came
off into the tepid night the plague fled with fright
behind them the fuming monster bellowed
through the microscopic parasite's though
inside they felt no anxiety
towards their eternal freedom they flew
within them the relief of escape spreadWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It is a very good poem; You painted the scene beautifully!. : )
-->someone asked what the rectangular monster was: It is of course a fly swatter : P
You should post your poetry on your website, that would be interesting to add!.
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it's good, but what was the rectangular monster!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
thats sooo good!! i really like all the descriptive words u used like: famished and tepid!. if its 4 skool and u hav 2 turn it in then im sure u'd get an A+++++++!! GREAT JOB!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
That's real nice!.
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! l!ke ! l!ke i really do ! thats good you have a great poem!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
thats kool
i mean poetry can be anything so yea thats goodWww@QuestionHome@Com