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Pardon me, do you have any grey matter!?
In the void above your eyebrows!?
Is there a feast of crows,
Or herd of mad cows!?
It's sad how,
The news needs a diaper or pad now!.
The truth is a fad now!.
That's bad now,
Who's rad now!?
I was war!
They wanted me to go to Iraq,
So Iran,
After Ghanistan
Where Bin Laden hangs his turban,
When he's slurping on bourbon,
In his Chevy Suburban!.
Drop the bomb on his cave and hurt him!
Why fight or barter!?
Why make him a martyr!?
Bring him over hear for justice
For our sons and daughters,
For our uncles and aunts!
I want to see this guy arrested!.
Isn't that what you want!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Indeed, I have much grey matter!.!.!.!.I use it too!
What I desire!.!.!.America to stay a free nation! Sometimes, it takes warring to keep our freedoms but, those who have fought and died, for our freedoms!.!.!.would agree! This nation offers much to its people and when you travel abroad, you see the differences there and here, in our nation!
I despise war! However, with satan as the master of this earth, for now, war will always be as, man loves warring for GAIN!
I will say, I believe in a war against terrorism as I have been a victim of terror! Everyone who lost a loved one, friend, and so on, on 9-11!.!.!.!.!.is a victim! Children growing up without a mom or, dad!.!.!.!.are victims too!
Let us NEVER forget!.!.!.!.there are those who seek to destroy us, our freedoms and our God! THIS, is worth taking a stand for and fighting for too!
May God guide this nation with justice and with His guidance!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I have only a small bit of gray matter I take out and inspect every so often!. This statement "The news needs a diaper or pad now!." is for sure a fact, they report only what they want, mostly celebrity gossip, or the "nicer" facts of the war!. Not what really goes on!. I have never been there, but every male in my family has been, and I see the effects and hear the real story!. Yes, I would like to see him arrested, among other things, it has taken too long!. We have lost too many!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like the form of this poem; it's very rap, but with a clean and positive message!. On the other hand, this is why I fantasize Mars and the Universe; there will always be war!. We can pray, negotiate, barter, threaten, surrender!. Whatever people do, others will attack them and make war!. It is in our genes, from the sperm who rush to be the first to Homo Sapiens--everything wars for survival, for power, for toys!. It will never change!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
The message is very strong and staccato in delivery!. The last two lines to me though could be stronger!. "I want to see this guy cuffed" etc!. Typos: So Iran!? "here for justice" You have sprinkled some great lines, one that stands out to me is "I was war!." Well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is friggen great!
I've got a book for you to check out, published in 1942!.
War and the Poet!.
Eberhart-Rodman
I did not find it for sale, yet, but the libraries have it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i want answers!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
'Do you have any grey matter!?' The question runs through my mind often!. I feel like screaming, you idiots! Great poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
eh!. its ok im not a big fan of rhyming poems thoWww@QuestionHome@Com
It is very much what I want!. Well said!.Www@QuestionHome@Com