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Friend
Into the heart of the matter my friend, Consciousness and the self,
Did you hear what the wind was stateing, states of matter and changes of state,
I could hear the autumn leaves drifting away, the chemical evolution of life,the silent cry,frozen tears of the heart,
Into the heart of the matter my friend!.
jimi
06/11/08Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
great sentiment, a good job Jimi, keep writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com