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Question: Disturbing poem entitled "Dark Wedding" !.!.!. rate my poem !!!!?
Across fields of burial ground,
She strolled down the aisle with a delicate gait!.
For fear in clouds are closely bound,
To lay on sanguine catafalque she can't wait!.
For Death rides on stallion of endless time,
Long black robes fly high with pride!.
Dark powers in bondage at its prime,
Marrying its gothic bride!.
Gothic beauty in corset with lace of saffron beads,
Tainted sky grinned, the ancient moon lit blood red!.
Her face hidden with veil of facade and the wedding proceeds,
Strolls closer to Death and the great sorrowful bed!.
Nightfall took her hand with grace,
Bringing her forward to Death!.
Given the kiss of death and cold reign over her face,
On the bed, she awoke bereft!.
She lays upon the catafalque gently,
Black roses in her grasp!.
To lower her six feet under was her last plea,
Death embraces her pale-white laps!.
Buried in tomb of deathly grandeur,
Forests laments in the forgotten arcade!.
Succumbed to death's embrace in darkness' twisted sphere,
Trapped in a cursed decade !.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i think the poem is great, however it speaks to me as if someone is unsure about getting married and that maybe they are not really in love and find themselves trapped!. if so then my advise is to seek psychiatric help !. but the poem is really cool!. it also seems to say that they have been raised to accept their fate and that ending the marriage by anything other than the ending of life is not an option!. careful where you tred here, it also speaks of material possesions but not tru love!. i give it a 8!.5 for creativity!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think this is the way many people feel when they are trapped in a place, situation, society or time period where they do not belong or cannot find any direction, purpose or true happiness!. For a person in this type of circumstance, life can be so torturous that they would prefer death!. Like being in limbo!.
I like that there could be many interpretations of what a poem like this means!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You lost your rhythem at this verse
"Gothic beauty in corset with lace of saffron beads,
Tainted sky grinned, the ancient moon lit blood red!.
Her face hidden with veil of facade and the wedding proceeds,
Strolls closer to Death and the great sorrowful bed!."
Lizzie R- What is shyme!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
the description of the bride is vivid and the way the death is explained is good
always end a romantic verse or a goth or any poem in a plain manner no curses no blood,no pain just end it in a plain simple manner
like
" and there she lays away !.
trapped in a lost eraWww@QuestionHome@Com
Very thought-provoking, and the imagery is fantastic!. It IS a dark poem, but it is really wonderful!. You writing is very captivating!.!.!.and the shyme pattern flows very nicely!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Are you by any chance Dani Filth!? Cuz in that case, you've lost yer edge man!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like your American Gothic style!. It is dark and clever!. I write American Gothic poetry as well!. I like that we can use death and make it sound so beautiful!. I would rate your poem a 9 outta 10 for its originality!. I have a poem wanna hear it!? OK here it is
A beautiful angel falling from the sky
Earth were you belong is burning
Maybe you swam up from hell
But Earth is burning just as hot
A ball of fire you can't put out
You are the powerless one now
Evil in your wicked ways
I can't describe the horrible things!.
Everywhere you go the fire follows
It devours everything in it's path
Just as you did with my heart
A demon disguised as man
How could I have loved you so much than
But hate you so much now!Www@QuestionHome@Com