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Question: English H!.w poem Help!.Someone who is good at poetry!!?
For my english H!.w I have to change this poem in to my own!. I have replace hollow men with brave men and stuffed men with scared men!. It has to make sence with men bein brave but yet scared to go into war!. It also relates to the book "A Seperate Peace"!. Thanks Alot
The Hollow Men
T!.S!. Eliot
I
We are the hollow men
We are the stuffed men
Leaning together
Headpiece filled with straw!. Alas!
5 Our dried voices, when
We whisper together
Are quiet and meaningless
As wind in dry grass
Or rats’ feet over broken glass
10 In our dry cellar
Shape without form, shade without color,
Paralyzed force, gesture without motion;
Those who have crossed
With direct eyes, to death’s other Kingdom
15 Remember us—if at all—not as lost
Violent souls, but only
As the hollow men
The stuffed men!.
II
Eyes I dare not meet in dreams
20 In death’s dream kingdom
These do not appear:
There, the eyes are
Sunlight on a broken column
There, is a tree swinging
25 And voices are
In the wind’s singing
More distant and more solemn
Than a fading star!.
Let me be no nearer
30 In death’s dream kingdom
Let me also wear
Such deliberate disguises
Rat’s coat, crowskin, crossed staves
In a field
35 Behaving as the wind behaves
No nearer—
Not that final meeting
In the twilight kingdom
III
This is the dead land
40 This is cactus land
Here the stone images
Are raised, here they receive
The supplication of a dead man’s hand
Under the twinkle of a fading star!.
45 Is it like this
In death’s other kingdom
Waking alone
At the hour when we are
Trembling with tenderness
50 Lips that would kiss
Form prayers to broken stone!.
IV
The eyes are not here
There are no eyes here
In this valley of dying stars
55 In this hollow valley
This broken jaw of our lost kingdoms
In this last of meeting places
We grope together
And avoid speech
60 Gathered on this beach of the tumid river
Sightless, unless
The eyes reappear
As the perpetual star
Multifoliate rose
65 Of death’s twilight kingdom
The hope only
Of empty men!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I will write the first verse as an example of what I think your teacher is looking for, but the rest you will have to figure out on your own!. And there are many references to actions that took place in the book, which (if you didn't read) is not going to help you complete this assignment!.
We are the brave men,
we are the scared men,
bending over from exhaustion,
limbs heavy from running!. How sad
our fleeting youth, when
we held onto ball
and ran away, hoping to live forever,
instead of dying like cut grass,
or falling from our heights
like a star shaken from the sky!.
Youth without reason, life without question,
exhubernt cry, freedom without meaning;
Those who we leave behind,
with minds untouched, except by grass and sky
remember us--it at all--not for what we became,
terrible in age, but only
as the brave men,
the scared men!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
That is a lot of work, if the poem was shorter I would help you but it isn't so your going to have to do it yourself!.
However I will tell you that your going to have to change more then what you have or it is considered plagiarism!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Diction, or word choice, can be crucial!. The word "stuffed" has a comic quality that detracts from the message of this poem!. When Elliot chose "hollow" he was suggesting an emptiness, a lack!. If I were doing the exercise you are,
I would not have selected a word with an opposite meaning, especially one that might have a comic effect!. I might have used, "sightless men," changing the meaning, but not the tone of the poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
The fact that you have to replace the antithetical pair hollow/stuffed with brave/scared means you need to follow suit with the rest of the poem!. Shape without form, shade without color, gesture without motion!.!.!.all impossible combinations, yet full of meaning!.!.!.you need to recreate these combinations with your new words!.
For example, the first stanza:
We are the brave men
We are the scared men
Leaning together
Headpiece filled with words!. Alas!
Our dried lines, when
We march together
Are quiet and meaningless
As bullets of dry grass
Or linen feet over sand and glass
In hot, dry weather
Shape without faces, shade without sun,
Paralyzed forces, attacks without motion;
!.!.!.now write the restWww@QuestionHome@Com