Short and sweet - will you please critique this poem?

Question: Short and sweet - will you please critique this poem!?

I look at you and smile
but you can't smile back
you just wag your tail
to tell me what you lack
the luch time dance
or the tea time moves
your always on time
so you never lose
eating your bone
on the suite or the chair
but I wouldn't change a thing
because your alaways thereWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I love the sentiment, I too have a dog that is treated as one of the children!. He eats nonstop, drools while eating my dinner and makes a hell of a mess, but I would not change him for the world!. Great! though there are spelling and grammar issues, they are nothing that cannot be changed in a few minutes!. well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I look at you and smile
and you smile back
with a wag of your tail
whack whack whack

the kibble time dance
the hello in your bark
the sideways glance
Is it potty time again!?

You love a bone
sometimes more than me
but I know I’ll never be alone
you will always be thereWww@QuestionHome@Com

i hope its about your dog and not your partner lol!. anyway, it wouldnt win any awards but i guess it emphasises your feelings towards your pet!.
gramatically it could be better e!.g!. you spelt a few words incorrectly like "lunch", "always", and "your" should be "you're"Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ok, it's a decent poem!.!. But I was sitting here noticing all of your spelling errors! "You're*" "Lunch*" "Always*" And never ever use contractions with literature! (can't couldn't shouldn't aren't) use the natural words!. Those are too harsh!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

im not feeling it!. It lacks flow and i found myself going back and reading it over to get the right speed!. keep working on it!. i know how hard it is because it sounds soo good in your head but it sometimes gets hard to translateWww@QuestionHome@Com

that is a really good poem!!
i love dogs!!
will you critique mine!?!?
http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.
thanks!!
ciaoWww@QuestionHome@Com

Apart from grammatical errors and needing work to it the poem is passable!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

thats cool!. It reminds me of how they say a dog is a mans best friend!. Your poem proves it true!. =]
Good Job!
Keep it up=]Www@QuestionHome@Com

Pretty good--you must like your dog!. Watch your grammar, though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Cute & lighthearted!! Nice light reading!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

a lil corny and childish with some of the words but over all its pretty good!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

OH MY GOSH! I LOOOVE IT ! THAT IS SO CUUUUUUUTE! THE LITTLE DOGGYYYY!!!!YYAYAYAYAYAYYAYAAWww@QuestionHome@Com

very nice, I like it a lot!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

r u talking about a dog and 7/10Www@QuestionHome@Com