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Question: Whaddya think of my sugar poems!?
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^ Asked for some help with sugar!.!. like poems, and I just slapped a few down!. Figured I might as well get some feedback!.

Sugar sugar, in my bowl!.
Better a lump of sugar than a lump of coal
now that would be a sight
my dainty teacup the one mum gave me
from the hills of Appalachia with the curly pomegranate
a huge lump of coal sticking out
with a useless teabag string
Lipton lumps of coal, on sale for 4!.99
or a teaspoon of black nasty coal
oh what it would do to the milk, the coffee and my morning bowl of oats!.

had i considered you a blessing until now!?

My precious lump of sugar!.

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If the streets were made of sugar
we all
would spin out uncontrollably
and attempt to get out of our sugar coated lives
our teeth decayingWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Sweet!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i really didn't read this because i just wanted to ask you something!.!.!.!.!.
did you just tell me that my poems suck because ur upset b/c i said that ur a perv when u wrote a poem about how u get "it on" with ur wife and about ur wife "smells like eggs" !?!?!?
b/c that's low and stupid and petty!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Those are all ridiculously strange!.
My advice- stop the rhyming!.Www@QuestionHome@Com