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Question: Do u like my poem i wrote it during math class!?
when the day is done, and the night has come, the children are all in there bed
when hags and trolls walk the earth,
and so do all the un-dead
The moon is high,but these no light shinning upon the ground
but if u are to listen you'd hear a terrible sound!.
of screems and crys and ghostly wales,
and monsters that have long swishing tails
but do not fret and do not fright and please dont open your eyes
cause is you see them and they see you,your in for a terrible suprise
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nice! it has a really nice flow, song like way to it! good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Can I be your spell-checker!? If you're going to post poetry, most people only take it seriously if the grammar is /perfect/!.
"When the day is done, and the night has come, the children are all in their bed,
when hags and trolls walk the Earth,
and so do all the undead!.
The moon is high, but there's no light shining upon the ground,
but if you were to listen, you'd hear a terrible sound!.
Of screams and cries and ghostly wails,
and monsters that have long, swishing tails!.
But do not fret and do not fright and please don't open your eyes,
'cause if you see them and they see you, you're in for a terrible surprise!."
I think I got it all spell-checked!.!.!.
Great poem :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Sounds like a good beginning to a Halloween poem!. Kind of scary!. And in case you didn't know about these typos:
there bed = their bed
un-dead = undead (that part doesn't make sense)
but these = but there's
shinning upon = shining upon
screems and crys = screams and cries
ghostly wales = ghostly wails
long swishing tails = long, swishing tails (or use "and" instead of a comma)
dont open = don't open (would flow better if you say "do not")
cause is you = because if you
your in for = you're in forWww@QuestionHome@Com