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Question: My poem continued!.!.!. check the first on my profile!. its long!!?
How dumb could he be!? Why hadn't he learned!?
Didn't he know that an airbag could burn!?
It burnt through his skin!. Glass cut through his heart!.
The pains in her chest still hurt her like darts!.
He once had loved her but she had said no!.
She wished now she hadn't!. Why did he go!?

It's years since the crash now but still she cries!.
The days go past!. Oh how time has passed by!.
Now she's married!. He's the man of her dreams!.
But when they pass a crash she has to scream!.
She remembers that sad day way to well!.
She can't help but thinking that he is in hell!.
He knew not of Jesus!. He hadn't been saved!.
She could have told him if she hadn't caved!.
She hadn't told him!. She "didn't know how!."
She wishes she would have!. She knows she can't now!.
She's tried to move on!. Had kid's of her own!.
But the pain in her chest still leaves her to moan!.
She has a great job, her life's brought her far!.
But she still remembers the sight of his car!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
it's wonderful
it's beautiful
it brought me to tearsWww@QuestionHome@Com

Yes, i read the first part also!.
Um, may I make ONE suggestion!. I think that by changing one word you can get a different feeling

in the second stanza, 5th line
Change it to

She remembers that sad day MUCH too well!.
instead of way!. much seems to flow better as I, in my opinion, read!. More dramatic, because your poem most definitely has that effect!.

keep writing!.
check out my poetry Qs!?
@ profile!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it
fabulous
excellent jobWww@QuestionHome@Com

omg that beautiful ~ did you write this!?Www@QuestionHome@Com