Can a vision be expressed in a Trigee?

Question: Can a vision be expressed in a Trigee!?

A Vision Revisited
by Elaine P

I saw you ………!. not with my eyes
with my soul …!.!.!.!.!.!.a vision of you
in my heart ……!.!.!.!.moving with me
felt your touch …!.!.!.forever near!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

A vision can be expressed in a trigee, and you have done so excellently!. And I have found 2 to be quite meaningful in and of itself!. I believe you should be happy with it!.

"not with my eyes" there is an innate sense of touch in those lines, something that you cannot see, but feel intensely!.

"a vision of you" a vision through touch, since sight is denied!. But a vision is not always straightforward which leads me too

"moving with me" this is not a still moment, active in your mind, always following, the sense of a presence unseen but ever felt

"forever near" and because this is not a still moment this vision that is not sight will always be with you, moving with you, changing as you change, becoming as you become!.

That's what I got from poem too, but the others were completely beautiful as well, all tying together to make a perfect vision, of all five senses, and maybe even the sixth!. Thanks, Elaine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i really love the mood you have created with this, kind of sensual!. My opinion; the "Not" is not needed, then you would have 1st stanza seeing without eyes and the 2nd with eyes and the 3rd with both soul and eyes, which i think gives a great contrast!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You are exploring the possibilities!. It`s hard for people to believe that the people who have left us can actually visit us anytime they want!. They come around to help and support us all the time!. You must keep an open mind or you will miss the visit!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is lovely as is, Maybe the reason your asking yourself
that Q is, "forever near" could be changed to many other words! and would still be a good read! Too many decisions
sometimes!. Kudos!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

No# 2 - since you said you are working on it - (suggestion) maybe change "not with my eyes" to something like - "in my mind's eye" - or something of same such imagery!. ;-) ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

There is nothing amiss with #2!. In fact, it is very poetic!. The trigee is a loving, comforting vision!. I await for one !.!.!. or #2 or #3 !Www@QuestionHome@Com

Peyote!.!.!.!.!.!.!.wonderful
powerful!.!.!.!.!.visionary
drug!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.visions

Just kidding!. Your trigee was well done!. Compliments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A very talented girl, congratulations well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This has a very good #1 and #3!.!.!.!.I am finding this same problem in mine, except I can't make a solid 3!. I am good at making #2!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think this is beautiful and I don't see anything wrong with #2!Www@QuestionHome@Com

A very sweet and loving trigee!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ah, what a lovely way to greet the morn! Vision onwards, Elaine!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Apparently it can and you have done it!Www@QuestionHome@Com