Are you groggy in the mornings?

Question: Are you groggy in the mornings!?

MORNING AFTER - senryu/nonet

over the water
night falls on ususpecting
lovers locked embrace!.

yesternight you made sweet love to me,
driving deep in body and soul,
reaching across time for love!.
enamored, i fell too!.
a new day opens,
mystery, hurt,
i thought!.!.!.
gone!.

Author's Note - lack of capitalization is intentional!. Thank you for reading!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I have consulted The Board of Directors of the Poetry Section, Department of Fine Answers and Capitalization!. They referred me to archy, mehitabel, and e!. e!. cummings!. All three feel strongly that capitalization is absolutely essential!. As archy told me, "upper case is upper class!." (To tell you the truth, sometimes he bugs me!.)

I tend to agree with Temari (that saucy gal!) regarding your experiments with a variety of novel forms!. And yet, even though you have obeyed the rules of two very distinct forms here, I do not feel that there is any constriction of your usual flow of words in this work!. One of the hallmarks of your style (just as pedantic verbosity is one of mine) is that flow - undulating and sensuous to the point of eroticism, whatever the meaning of the words themselves!. As to the question posed, I wish I had the opportunity to wake up groggy as a result of the actions described!. Fortunately, I do not require the exhaustion produced by such amatory adventures!. I am just naturally a groggy, grouchy, grump!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

senyru -- five lines nature based though somewhat relaxed less restrictive - without looking them up as I don't favour the form and rarely have attempted them, I think the syllable counts are 575755 though i wouldn't put money on it!.
But I do know haiku is three lines of 5, 7, 5, syl
An rigidly nature based-as for the nonet I am not able to comment though thought they had nine lines!?

The haiku start is good, the remainder I didnt particularly likeWww@QuestionHome@Com

I love it! It's a great poem!. As to the other people who don't get it, or don't consider it a poem, they couldn't be more wrong!. I think poetry doesn't have to rhyme, so long as you the poet knows what it is you're trying to say!. I personally like it!. Peace!Www@QuestionHome@Com

if i could give thumbs down, i so would to that guy who said its not poetry if it doesnt rhyme!. bleh

anyway, i like it!. its just describing an event, i dont see how you couldnt get it!. you did a good job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

!.!.!.only dreaming!.!.!. an acrostic as well!.!. nicely done!!

I must privately admit!.!.!. I miss your free forms!.!.!. I miss that free flowing thought!.!.it inspired me so!.!.!.

Thank you for this!.

TemariWww@QuestionHome@Com

Cosign Temari "Only dreamig" is what I see too - the N line is missing from the 2nd last line!. It could have been a true acrostic as well!. Triple lovely!.

Otherwise another beautiful effort!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I am sometimes groggy!. It depends on how much sleep I had!. Some espresso usually helps!. Or something like a really cold shower!. You should try one of those!. Sometimes I nap at work and wake up really refreshed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Beautiful dear!
I don't have the guts to post my "personal ones!."
Thanks for the inspiration!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I fail to see how it can be called poetry when it does not rhyme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I read it three times, and i just don't get it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

LOVE IT!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like itWww@QuestionHome@Com

weightless!.!.!.it was that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com