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Question: Do you like my peom!?!?!? READ PLEASE!?
It's called:
Rainy Day
It's about to rain,
I can hear the thunder!.
The room lights up!.
We both jump!.
We sit there watching it!.
We know it's coming soon!.
Thunder and lightning clash together!
The sun was shining 3 minutes ago!.
Oh! What happened!?
The clouds turn from white to gray all at once!.
I think it's still lovely!.
Now the rain comes!.
Swish!
We both fall asleep in each others arms on that rainy day that is still beautiful!.
Listen and you too will hear the sounds of a Rainy Day!.!.!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i like the voice in it!. i kind of think, in my opinion, that its like, the day cant be bad becuase youre with each other!. thats th vibe its giving me!. i love it!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Well it was very contrasting!. First of all the beginning went about like your life was well then some awful thing happened and you were left in the rain!.(I'm not saying that's what you were saying but that is how the typical symbolism of this kind of thing usually appears) and then you talk about as if it's just a minor change that still works as in the man (or boy) you love has changed in some way but it is still perfectly fine, which really doesn't have a lot of feeling, It's just kind of like "well you changed but that's cool"!. Frankly It doesn't really mesh and it doesn't feel very emotionalWww@QuestionHome@Com
Iv'e heard something like that before!. You could make it better by really thinking of something more origanal!. It is good though, not great!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Its terribleWww@QuestionHome@Com
It's alright, yeah I like it i guess!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it!. but it doesn't read like a poem, more a narration of events, but who am I to say!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its ok!.!. ive heard betterWww@QuestionHome@Com