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Question: Poem critique: "will i"!?
lately i've been running around in circles
i don't know whether to stay or whether to go
all of my hopes and dreams have been forgotten
maybe i need to relax and take it slow
i pray somedey i'll learn to love another
but until then i'll just have to deal with myself
behind this picket fence and deep undercover
inside this perfect home there is a perfect hell


i just wonder
if i'll ever
get rid of these dreams
taunting me
will i

take the pain and use it to my advantage
sometimes self pity is harder than it seems
the demons are actually quite difficult to manage
i have so many scars needed to be cleaned
i would like to crawl out before things worsen
but i don't understand how that can be
in the midst of darkness one can and must find redemption
or sit in the grave and watch the darkness bury your dreams

i just wonder
if i'll ever
get rid of these dreams
taunting me
i willWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
fkin love it i really really love the way you ''talk'' lol but i wanna try to answer it soooo lol life and love can take you far and redemption can defend you or help your demons all in all follow what not only your heart wants but as well as your mind and soulWww@QuestionHome@Com