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Question: I just wrote this poem, I wanted to see what you guys think!. Criticism welcome!.!?
Do you understand howling exclamations
of joy,
the sorrowful wails of the living skeletons
who fade away from neglect
the angry mad screams unheard in the public
eye,
the man who sits up after years of being
immobile
and raving to the black night in high unawareness,
feeling up his nurse in the dead hours of the
new Dawn,
and the hipsters who tell tales of the good
dying days,
of driving into the city worked up in a frenzy
after a night of riding and speed
hearts racing in a Dizzy Atmospere!.
And the women who dance and crash
drunkenly into the post-American boom,
where the corporate monster sits idly
twiddling his metallic thumbs in corporate
satisfaction,
laughing in his chrome heart about the man
who is of flesh and blood,
and the direct descendant of Adam!.
Have you seen the Be-Bop revivalists
that speed away into the night,
sweating and pouring and oozing Jazz
in dark rocky cool smoky lush happenings,
speaking of Joy,
and less incriminating things!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Nice one, true
but it contains a kinda dark energy in beginning!. Hope you wrote for life resemblance of some people, n not your feelings about lifeWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow i really like!
i dont really know what criticism to give you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. I think I know what you are getting at!! Good Work! I might even print this out one day and show it to my AP teacher!

KudosWww@QuestionHome@Com

it start off like an emo poem and ends like a thgoughtful!.!.!.!. will smith moovie type thing!. i like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i actually really liked this it ws really good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

that is really goodWww@QuestionHome@Com