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Question: The Siren!.!.!.!.a poem, care to comment!?
The Siren

Upon the rocks she sat
Calling to all who would hear
“Come, Come, safety is here”
“Trust my call and shelter will be yours”
Vision lovely, tempting, longing
Respond they did one by one
Some had focus and cleared the rocks
Others fell short and met their doom
But still she called
“Come, Come, safety is here”
“Trust my call and shelter will be yours”
Those that grasped a touch of her feet
Felt the surging power of her soul
All they heard was her voice
And nothing more
Others she embraced as a Mother
Flock around her heels they did
Hanging on her every word
Some only heard
“Come, Come, safety is here”
“Trust my call and shelter will be yours”
When the darkness became light
Her duty ended
She walked off as a spirit and was no more
Not a trace to be found
Was she real, or did we create her!?
Did she leave behind a trail of joy or sadness!?
A heroic legacy or the drawing of fools!?
Upon the rocks we now lie
Calling
“Help us, help us
All we needed was shelter
Where is the haven we can trust!?”
Siren song sounds no more
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This is one that though the story is sound, the attempt worthy, the meter is rough and thus made me pause and not appreciate!. This could use some of that excellent Jellz blue pen to fine tune!. But as always, that is just my opinion!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I had to push myself to read this poem all the way through!. I just didn't understand much of any of it!. I know it's about some protective mother, but I don't know who she is protecting!. You used to many pronouns!. Your imagery was to mysterious!. Some stanzas didn't really fit in with the next!.
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Um!.!.!.not one for me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com