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Question: What do you think of this: basing the rhyming scheme of my poem on another!? Read details!!?
Run!

The day is bright, it’s time to go,
From the top of my head to my baby toe,
My body is screaming that one word,
I don’t ignore it, how absurd!.
Run!

I do up my laces, tie back my hair,
I have my nicest socks to wear,
I am now ready to chase down the wind,
The day is crisp, but I just grinned!.
Run!

I set out at a decent pace,
My mind wanders to outer space,
I know just then there was nothing wrong,
As my legs beat the rhythm of an unknown song,
Run!

“Look at her go” the lady said,
I knew my face was turning red,
“Faster, faster!” yelled my mind,
I felt like my stars had just aligned!.
Run!

Shoes upon the gravel sung,
Air fills up my young, strong, lungs,
Ka-thump, ka-thump, so beat my heart,
I knew I was off to the right start!.
Run!


I based this on the poem 'Excelsior" by longfellow!.
here's the real poem : http://www!.readbookonline!.net/readOnLine!.!.!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like your poem; the rhyming scheme works!.

Did you notice this is a happy poem!? Congratulations!.

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