Another poem? Will you critique please?

Question: Another poem!? Will you critique please!?

Your name is just the beginning
Of a euphoric topic!.
You're the prequel to bliss!.
Ever a conduit of grace, and I need you!.
More than sight
For I see no other!.
More than breath
For you fill my lungs,
My mind, my veins, my soul!.

We are two, subtract one
Equals us!.
We multiply love
And we divide possessions!.
We've earned each other!.
You are my greatest sum!.
I know!.
I've done my homework!.
Now I work from home,
Where my heart lives!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

<wyomugs wishes her name was Jackie>

Have an "artsy" day!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love is a powerful emotion, one side of the coin of life!. The other is hate!. I like this poem for it show your love for your wife!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is so beautiful semper fi, your wife is a very lucky woman!. this really describes marriage and all it's splendor and beauty!. God blessWww@QuestionHome@Com

A lovely tribute, to evidently a one and only love!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Jackie is a lucky lady, and from the sound of it, you are an even luckier man!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love it!

Jackie will love it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Semper, this is great! Your words are beautiful!.!.!.I think Jackie will love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Are you getting any of these published!? Cuz I think you are good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

She's a lucky woman!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good one!. Having a soul-mate is so important!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

one word: WOW!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wish i could write like that!

xWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like the start and I reckon your wife will love it and that is all that really matters, but for me, as poem it looses its way in the 2nd stanza!. It tries to hard to keep the mathematical analogy going!.

May I be bold enough to suggest considering!.

We were two and now we are one;
equals that nothing can divide!.
in love; our passions multiplied,
the sum will rise; never subside!.

I expect you can improve on what I have written if you give yourself a bit of time!.Www@QuestionHome@Com