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Question: Read my poem!? I know you don't wan't to but please!.!.!.!.!? free 2 points! ;)!?
The Piano
How many lonely years I’ve lain,
Remembering forgotten pain,
Echoes, echoes, calling out,
“I miss those tunes you brought about!”
My lonely strings wonder in grief,
“What causes all this disbelief!?”
Bring out the yellowed sheets of tunes,
Like the light of a thousand moons,
Let out your tears, let me help thee
Pour out your heart into each lone key!.
Play out what’s right, forget the wrongs,
Together my lone notes form songs!.
And you can bring me back to life,
Save me from this world of strife!.
Harmonies like moonlight, weep,
Can you lull a lullaby to sleep!?
Play me by day or play me night,
Notes like falcons in full flight,
Like richest chocolate on your tongue,
Listen for songs that remained unsung!.
Music calls to you to say,
“Pull my wretched heart away!”
The love, sadness, or joy,
Anger seeking to destroy,
Express it through my lonely keys,
Because quickly fade sweet melodies!.
I'm 13 by the way!. Any suggestions would be great!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
As a fellow 13-year-old poet, I have to say this is wonderful!. Personally, I don't rhyme because I always end up with "moon" and "June", but you seem to have a really good grasp on it!. You could try using some more literary devices like some alliterations, but your personification is fabulous!. The quotes might not be necessary, though!.
All in all, I love it!. Keep it up! =]Www@QuestionHome@Com
The poem was great with syntax, and word choice!. My suggestion to you is to reach out past rhyming!.!.!.poetry can be more than that!. And also, try happy poems too!. Being at your age I know that "angry" or "sad" poems seem to come to mind more than happy poems!. Try one and post again!.
"All is not lost because all is not found!."Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think its a great poem, very strong!. I can see you probably put a lot of thought into that!. Go to www!.poetry!.com and sign up, i have quite a few poems on there, and it will be under a copywrite so no one else can tamper with it!. It dosnt cost anything, but it will be copywritten with your name!.!.!.I would HIGHLY RECOMMEND that option!.
Hope this helps!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Lovely!. Very nice use of words, and very expressive for a young lady of your age!.
Beautiful thoughts and very nice word pictures!. Stay with it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I'm 13 too!. Well, almost 14!.
Don't assume we don't want to read it! I love poetry and I thought that that was absolutely amazing!
I hope that wins something!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Your 13!?!? Wow I'm impressed very beautiful !Www@QuestionHome@Com
I thought it was beautiful!. And I also think that a person can relate to this, particularly someone who used to play piano and hasn't done for ages!. Well done!. Keep writing! (I'm 25)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Awesome poem! I love it ^_^ Nice job!. Way better then anything i can do and im 14 xDWww@QuestionHome@Com
its okay you seem really depresedWww@QuestionHome@Com
WOW!!! Good Job!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
this is a really great poem
=]Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow pretty good!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow that was really amazing put!!
youve got talent!!! i feel like paula abdule on american idol!.!.lolWww@QuestionHome@Com
thats so cool! its cool that u did it from the pianos point of view! =)Www@QuestionHome@Com
weeeeey thats one good poem for a 13 yr old!!!!
u did great ;; no suggestions needed (:Www@QuestionHome@Com