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Question: Is my poem okay!? Does it fit into a format, or does it even need to!?
Upon Tuesday

Upon Tuesday,
Under a sky so blue
We walked home together
And started anew!.

Upon Wednesday,
We smiled as we passed
Each other in the halls
But went out seperate ways
Blocked by those mental walls!.

Upon Thursday,
You left me confused
Confronting to me that I was your muse!.
But I knew you had everything to lose!.

Upon Friday,
I felt a strange sort of sickness,
As I saw how perfectly your hands fit into each other's
And gave an jealous stare, that I honestly didn't try to cover!.

Upon Saturday,
I listened to your favorite songs for a few hours, exactly three
And tried to see which ones could be related to me
But I honestly couldn't find any!.!.!.

Upon Sunday,
I screamed at you over the phone,
Leaving you dazed but probably not alone!.
You had another to talk to when you were bored
That much has been shown!.

Upon Monday,
I caught your eye, to my dismay!.
But within our silence, I knew what you were trying to say!.
And in the end, I guess that made it all okay!.

Upon Tuesday,
Under a sky so blue
We walked home together
And started anew!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
that was amazing!. i loved it, especially the ending and the 'upon's!.

one thing, though!. each stanza has a different rhythm and it was a tiny bit awkward 'cause it took a little bit to get used to each one!. but i think that's okay!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow, I really like this poem!. Very dramatic and!.!. I can't find a word for it but it's very good!.

there was an error though:And gave an jealous stare, that I honestly didn't try to cover!.
It should be a jealous stare :D

very good poemWww@QuestionHome@Com

I love it that is awesome good job!. very different type of poetry but you've nailed it!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

its a very beautiful poem!. i don't see anything wrong with it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com