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Position:Home>Poetry> Would you comment on my first Poem?Question: Would you comment on my first Poem!? sun light blinds us with passion
never alone were always in fasion are we truly loved or are we deceived is it me they love or is it money and greed from the moment I wake to sound of the owl I duck and I dive from the constant howls of gimmi this I want it now love plays no part of that I am sure oh the joys of parenthood tell me what is the cureWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Oh dear it looks like you are feeling a bit like a cash cow!. I find your poem both humorous and sad!. there is no need for interpretation as the message is quite clear!. I think you will find quite a lot of people from all over the world will relate to this!. great for the first go, write more, if you are like me you will learn to love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I'm no poetry lover, but it reads well, it might even make a good song, like something Morrisey would sing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Not bad for a first try!. The message is clear and so true!. Keep writing, you have talent and a sense of humor!.Www@QuestionHome@Com to be honest it's good but there are so many pems that are like this on yahoo answers and it's rather boring now someone should do something a little different with a little more meaningWww@QuestionHome@Com keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I like it - it's simple, concise, to the point!. Hope you write some more!. well done!. gd luckWww@QuestionHome@Com im just answering for points but i do <3 your poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com very well thought out and written bravo!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com |