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Question: We Twelve: what do you think!?
we twelve:
We twelve sit here and debate
was he wrong was he right!?
what was going through his mind
as he reacted that night!?
was it really him there!?
or was it perhaps another
what could motivate a man
to kill his own brother!?
was it lust, was it wrath!?
was it just a mistake!?
can we send this man to prison
should his entire life, we take!?
will he pay for this in his own way!?
will regret eat him alive!?
or is this something we should consider
as our decision, we will arrive
Oh, what a great responsibility
onto our shoulders has befell,
to place judgement on the life of a man
is left up, to we twelveWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I wouldn't want to be one of the twelve and have to make a decision, especially when there is a death penalty!
Even when the decision would be life, that is a very long time to be in prison, you posted a good poem so people out there could reflect on some of the decisions jurors have to make! Good job again Laura!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
The concept of the poem is good, so are the arguments, to a point!. Your tone is good, but your beats are inconsistant!. I'd suggest having someone read this out loud to you so you can listen to how it was written (not how it sounds in your head)!. As silly as that may sound, your brain plays tricks on you and makes your poem sound "right", even when it doesn't sound that way to others!.!.!.so you need to become an "other" by having someone read your poem to you out loud!. Don't stop them, don't correct them, just listen and make note of those areas that need to be corrected!.!.!.you'll be amazed at how much better your poem will sound if you do this!.
!.!.!.meanwhile, keep writing, this was a good first draftWww@QuestionHome@Com
so juror!.!. all you have to do as a part of the jury!.!.!.!.judge using your conscience!.!.!.!.i like your poem!.!.!.!.justice should prevail!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com